EXT. STREETS - MORNING
(Added this scene)
This is the intro/title sequence. Choppy, almost montage style sequence of Will running, intercut with credits.
EXT. PIER - MIDDAY
Two male teenagers face each other, WESLEY and LUCAS. Wesley looks intimidated and is clearly inferior. Lucas raises a fist. Hits Wesley. He falls.
Wesley lies, face down, on the ground. Lucas walks away, into the distance.
WESLEY (V.O.)
So much for taking the hit like a man...
Wesley places his hands on the ground and pushes up, lifting himself. He pulls his knees up and kneels, leaning back on his legs. He puts his hands to his face, checking for blood or bruises. He picks himself up and takes a few stumbling steps. He bends double and spits blood from his mouth.
WESLEY (V.O.)
Wasn't expecting a hit like that.
Wesley straightens himself up.
WESLEY (V.O.)
At least I'll be left alone now.
(shortened this scene)
EXT. STREET 2 - MIDDAY
WESLEY (V.O.)
(Moved this line from the end of the previous scene)
Hopefully...
Wesley walks along an urban, rough-looking street, looking around for any people walking by.
WESLEY (V.O.)
You know, when something happens and you make your choices, and then mull over it, and make different choices? (changed word order to make more sense)
He continues walking.
WESLEY (V.O.)
That's the benefit of hindsight. (put these lines together) The French have their own phrase for it. But when they talk about it, it's for laughs.
He turns, and walks towards the door.
WESLEY (V.O.)
My problem still had a punchline.
He looks into his reflection, and touches his face, again checking for cuts and bruises.
WESLEY (V.O)
Not too bad.
EXT. PIER - IMAGINED
(changed this scene to make more sense, the floor on the pier would not be wet enough to allow for slipping)
Two male teenagers face each other, WESLEY and LUCAS. Wesley looks intimidated and is clearly inferior.
Lucas steps forward and throws his punch. Wesley dodges. Lucas struggles to regain his balance. Wesley takes a second's hesitation before running off down the pier.
He turns back. Wesley has ran to the end of the pier. He isn't stopping.
EXT. STREET - IMAGINED
Wesley is hiding, crouched down beside the street. Lucas approaches and stares down at him.
EXT. STREET - REAL
(changed it from standing still to walking to keep the pace up)
Wesley walks past, staring at the place where he saw himself crouched down. Then, he turns off and walks away.
(Cut line here)
EXT. PARK - MIDDAY
(Added a location and action to this scene, was previously just a plan for dialogue)
Wesley sits on a bench, staring out across the bay.
(Added a location and action to this scene, was previously just a plan for dialogue)
Wesley sits on a bench, staring out across the bay.
WESLEY (V.O.)
Maybe running wouldn't be so good an idea. (put lines together) There's the regular solution to a fight. Hit first.
There is a young man sitting on a bench to the side of Wesley's bench.
WESLEY (V.O.)
Supposed to let them know who you are, what they're dealing with.
The young man gets up and approaches Wesley.
YOUNG MAN
'scuse me mate, you got a light?
Wesley stares off, almost as if he didn't hear.
WESLEY (V.O.)
I think Lucas already knew what he was dealing with.
Wesley's hand dives into his pocket for the lighter. He pulls it out and the lighter catches his eye.
WESLEY (V.O.)
It would have been worth a try.
The young man twitches impatiently. Wesley stares into the reflection in the side of the lighter.
The young man twitches impatiently. Wesley stares into the reflection in the side of the lighter.
WESLEY (V.O.)
Second chances are never worth much.
EXT. PIER - MIDDAY
Two male teenagers face each other, WESLEY and LUCAS. Wesley looks intimidated and is clearly inferior.
Lucas steps forward, clenching a fist. Wesley's hand darts up to his face. Wesley steps back, almost in shock at his own movement. Lucas drops immediately. He lies, motionless on the ground.
(cut scene here - we removed the ghostly visions idea.)
EXT. OVERVIEW - MIDDAY
Wesley leans against a wall, yet again looking out over a view of the seafront.
WESLEY (V.O.)
I'm sure we could have worked something out. (put lines together) Like stopping a train by asking nicely. Something says I got off easy the way things went.
Wesley takes his phone out of his pocket and stares into its reflective screen.
EXT. PIER - MIDDAY
(moved this scene to earlier in the film)
Two male teenagers face each other, WESLEY and LUCAS. Wesley looks intimidated and is clearly inferior.
Lucas steps forward and raises a fist. He pauses. A phone rings in his pocket. His hand dives down into his pocket. He turns away from Wesley and raises the phone to his ear. His face drops.
He talks on the phone and gets visibly aggravated. He starts gesturing wildly.
(cut scene short)
(cut scene short)
EXT. CAR PARK - MIDDAY
An empty car park, with only a few cars parked around, by no means full.
WESLEY (V.O.)
Problem solved, you think.
Wesley enters the car park, and begins walking across.
WESLEY (V.O.)
Take a hit, be a martyr, and it's end of the story.
Wesley enters the car park, and begins walking across.
WESLEY (V.O.)
Take a hit, be a martyr, and it's end of the story.
The camera cuts and reveals Wesley walks towards an old car that doesn't seem too well-maintained. There is a person, not clearly seen, sitting in the driver's seat.
WESLEY (V.O.)
Every story's got an epilogue.
Wesley walks up to the car and begins leaning down into the driver's side window.
WESLEY (V.O.)
The hit's got consequences, reverberations.
He begins to have a conversation with the unseen person in the car.
He begins to have a conversation with the unseen person in the car.
WESLEY (V.O.)
Doesn't everything?
Wesley's head turns, and he notices the car's wing mirror, catching his reflection. He stares into it, thoughtfully.
Wesley's head turns, and he notices the car's wing mirror, catching his reflection. He stares into it, thoughtfully.
EXT. PIER
Two male teenagers face each other, WESLEY and LUCAS. Wesley looks intimidated and is clearly inferior.
Wesley raises his hands up. He says something. He begs. Lucas steps forward and throws a punch. Wesley hits the floor.
(cut extra information out)
EXT. STAIRS - MIDDAY
(original script was too long, too complicated and began to repeat ideas, so we removed much of the later part of the film)
(original script was too long, too complicated and began to repeat ideas, so we removed much of the later part of the film)
A dilapidated looking set of stairs, steep and narrow. Wesley slowly walks up.
WESLEY (V.O.)
Talking about stories, I wonder what his was. (put lines together) Troubled young man like that.
Wesley carries on climbing the stairs.
WESLEY (V.O.)
Makes you think, (put lines together) but I'm glad he got to work out his frustrations on my face... I'll just think of it as charity work.
Wesley looks down at the ground, notices a piece of a broken mirror lying on the ground. He picks it up, rotating it into his hand, watching the reflection shift. He stares into it, before throwing it down the stairs.
EXT. SEAFRONT - MIDDAY
(changed the last pier scene from a fight, to simply shots of a chase)
An imagined scene. Wesley runs, and Lucas chases close behind.
(changed the last pier scene from a fight, to simply shots of a chase)
An imagined scene. Wesley runs, and Lucas chases close behind.
(Cut scene here)
EXT. STAIRS - MIDDAY
(ending shortened)
The piece of broken mirror lies on the ground. Reflected in it, two figures run past.
The piece of broken mirror lies on the ground. Reflected in it, two figures run past.
WESLEY (V.O)
Definitely should have done something.
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